She dropped the phone and fell on the floor in a puddle of tears...

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Sometimes enough is enough.

I’m sure you know the feeling.

As we got closer to our “Get-Us-To-Maui” promotion, our 18-hour super sale, we increased the drama in our stories.

More drama = more glued eyeballs on the other end.

If you do it right.

With only 2 days left before the sale, we started sending a lot of emails to those who signed up for the special notification list.

We piled on the stories. Our already warm audience started to boil with anticipation.

This email definitely turned up the dial on the stove-top audience burner. 

I used a somewhat unfair advantage of my sobbing 6-year old to lay it on thick.

Here’s the story...

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Email #12 of 18

Subject: I can’t take this any more

It had hit the fan.

Enough was enough.

I’d been through various heavy treatments to cure my ITP.

Nothing worked.

The doctors were really pressuring me to have a splenectomy. But Doug was still in Poland. He had one month to go.

We spoke on the phone late one Sunday night and I completely lost it. I couldn’t take it all anymore.

Doug was really finished with everything he needed to do. He’d finished his dissertation. He’d had a big recital at the Chopin University. He’d had a big performance of his Catholic Mass at the Cathedral downtown. It was even on national television and the radio.

So, we decided it was time to call it quits.

Doug got permission from the University, the Fulbright Commission, and his teacher to end his Fulbright a month early.

A few days after that phone call, it was time to tell the kids that Daddy was coming home early.

We had a fun little routine for our phone calls. As soon as the kids picked up the phone Doug would say…"how many more days until Daddy comes home…?”

But this time, even though we still have 30+ days in our count, Doug was going to surprise our 6-year-old Aubrey (our oldest) with the news.

He said…"Aubrey, guess what? I have a surprise for you!”

“What?”

“I’m coming home tomorrow.”

She dropped the phone and fell to the floor in a puddle of tears. She’d been so brave for so long.

She’s such a good mature girl. We didn’t realize how hard it all had been on her too.

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Well, Doug came home the next day. It happened to be my birthday. It was the best birthday present ever!

The doctors took out my spleen a couple weeks later. The operation cured my ITP almost overnight.

And thus began my search for cleaner living. Life without a spleen is not dangerous. But there are 3 viruses that can cause me serious damage. So I started my HIGH ALERT search for better and healthier ways to keep my home safe and clean.

And I guess the rest is history. I LOVE having a Norwex business. I LOVE helping you and people everywhere have safer, cleaner lives. I love saving you money vs buying hoards of paper towels and unnecessary toxic cleaners you use.

And now, we’re only 2 days away from the SALE OF A LIFETIME!

35% off every order over $50 of any and all products Norwex offers.

Now, I want to know what questions you have.

You’ve probably been making a list of what you want to get. But are you confused about anything? Or, are you wondering how well a certain product works? I want to hear all about it.

Please hit REPLY and ask me all your questions. I want you to get the most out of your Norwex products.

I’m really looking forward to our 18-hour madness on Monday. From 6 a.m. until midnight, mountain time. Monday, June 25th.

I’ll see you then!

Have a great germ-free day!

Janae

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Here’s a tip for your Email Melodrama.

Identify times in your life or business that were REALLY challenging. 

The times you thought you weren’t gonna make it. 

These moments are FILLED TO THE BRIM with authentic emotion. 

The kind that reaches through the computer or smartphone screen, grabs your readers heart, and squeezes.

I can help you with that. That’s sorta my thing.

But you have to be willing to go deep and really open up. 

The more vulnerable you get, the more your audience will feel and understand your authentic emotions. And that’s the key to increasing your sales.

Authenticity is HUGE! 

Let’s dig into your story and find those authentic moments so you can get maximum sales in a way that’s not at all manipulative, but full of authentic value to your customers.

Hit me up. Let’s chat.

www.SymphonicCopywriting.com/contact

And may your copy every be melodic and authentically, emotionally harmonious!

Doug